I read a decent portion of this, and it’s really hard to track what’s going on with some of the scenes. I’d also like to earnestly ask - do you have any autism spectrum disorder? A lot of the interactions between people, internal thoughts, and sentence structure/method of writing ran counter to many of the thoughts I’d have while reading. I couldn’t adequately make sense of characters’ actions, how time scenes progressed, or why certain sentences were used/had any remote relevance in some areas. Also, there’s a huge contrast in writing effort between certain lines: there are multiple sentences that are structured poetically, but then a lot of descriptive lines or thoughts are written with the simplest adjectives. I am not trying to be rude, but I am genuinely curious if you have any form of ASD.