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jhkoenig OP t1_ja6oyz9 wrote

Reply to comment by Rubin0 in Once more into the breach: roast my (updated) landing page by jhkoenig

Thank you for this feedback! May I ask what phone you are using? I only have an iPhone for real-world testing. Did you check out the "View Demo Account" functionality? If so, how did that look on your phone?

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Rubin0 t1_ja6rhx8 wrote

iPhone 7.

So, being blunt, I didn’t end up clicking any links because I wasn’t hooked and there was too much to read. There needs to be a single line that defines what makes your product great at the very top that convinces your users that it’s worth going further.

As someone who has gone through lots of job searches, I haven’t used paper submissions in decades so implying that your software is better at tracking than paper makes it seem super outdated. Focus on why it is valuable to the user and sell it in a single statement.

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