Lavantha t1_itckl2s wrote
“We’ll you see ‘hero’ I have a plate of spaghetti but they don’t make big enough meatballs for it cause apparently theres not enough meat in the world. So I said ‘sure there is’ and here we are” The hero looked puzzled like my explanation wasn’t good or reasonable. “Look, I’m a titan. That’s a whole different species, if I’m able to it makes sense for me to eat a bunch of humans as an accessory to my food.” The hero stopped for a second. “Your making a meatball out of humans” I nodded. “Okay your thinking of it as disgusting cause you yourself are a human but please note that I did leave a bunch of humans still intact so they can still repopulate and humans were already way to overpopulated so I’m doing a good thing.” They stared at my food nose turned back in disgust. “Why aren’t I part of ‘it’ then?” I let out a hollowed laugh. “Your one of the only mortals who know of my existence, where would be the fun in that? Now I’m getting hungry and I think it’s about time for you to leave.” They just stood there, obviously thinking. “Leave” they scattered off and down my mountain.
Seaofgioy t1_itcy4pn wrote
I liked the titan take buuuut, you really need this: You're =you are; Your= you own. Too much Two things; To spell.
Not that bad, is it! Thank you for your story! Reminded me of zeus and Chronos a bit, with a God of War vibe.
Lavantha t1_itcymiy wrote
I know :( I have spelling problems but I also really like writing, they conflict each other a lot
Seaofgioy t1_itd0vea wrote
They don't, or rather, won't, with enough practice! Keep on writing, and reading of course! Always read twice, and post once. Alchemy is supposed to be "measure twice, mix once", and writers are alchemists that conjure wonders with mere words! Keep up the passion!
BrightFirelyt t1_itf1zpe wrote
We all start somewhere. Don't worry. Just keep writing, and eventually all the rules and spellings will become second nature.
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