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Seer-x t1_iybfgzf wrote

Reply to comment by Yellowtail36 in [WP] Your Significant Other has landed a book publishing deal! You're very proud of them, even if you don't actually enjoy their writing. One day, on a whim, you buy an actual copy in a book store. It's nothing like the pages they gave you to read. Nothing. by veriverd

The first part of the story has wat too much dialogue almost so that i got tired of it after reaching the middle of the story. Not to mention the dialogues are too bland and no spice or much intresting things in it. At least they are not too awkward so thats a plus.the whole story gave me a vibe that it was based on real life or your experience. I don't know how to put it in words since i am not much of a writer but it builds a wrong sense of mystery or suspense by not giving an explanation of the situation and it causes the end to not have enough punch to it. Still you wrote it and someone has read it. Keep trying until you write a great story. (Words of encouragement btw i am too awkward lol)

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