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peach2play t1_iwc01yf wrote

Reply to comment by LordLovesGingers in [WP]"Why are you just standing there and where is your uniform?! You are here to serve the demon king and we can't have someone incompetent like you, get moving!". I knew I hadn't met most of my lower-ranked generals so he must not recognize me. No matter I want to see how this will play out. by Blackrose_920

Love it! You should then keep going with him going in disguise in other places!

As to the story, I didn't see any issues, grammar or otherwise. Nothing jarring to knock me out of the narrative, and that can be really tough to do.

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