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HedgeKnight t1_j5129sd wrote

“Expired”

She had tunnel vision to an outside dream
Crimson passions spawning duplicitous schemes

She saw my life
ripe for the taking

I thought she gave me a dose
of some experimental drug
prescribed off-label
by something in a parallel universe
where everything had worked out for us
I left it in the medicine cabinet
beyond the lifespan of forgiveness
until I felt safe throwing it out

The act of cleaning gives me time to consider
that she wanted my life
not to take
but to have
or to trade
a fair dream in any universe
alas, it’s faded
expired

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moinatx t1_j526o6y wrote

I liked this a lot. I especially love the way you tied ideas like medication and space in different ways throughout the poem. The tone and mood are well managed. Sometimes poetry with this sort of heartbreak/loss don't work. This does.

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