the piece is a little disorganized, imo, and doesn't really get into the topics that it brings up. It certainly does stand as a point about how facts and values can overlap and how natural language is an imperfect tool for expressing ideas. I would tell the author to put the first paragraph down three or so paragraphs, so that we don't read about an elephant and then wonder why we are talking about a candy bar. I would also ask the author if they wanted the "paper" to be about elephants and personhood or if they wanted it to be about the unfortunate situation of overlapping concepts that share the same word.