SpeaksYourWord
SpeaksYourWord t1_jedh0rx wrote
Reply to comment by Go-to-bed_Good-Night in [WP] You been feeling really low energy recently. So much that you don't even want to go and fight your nemesis. Suddenly, you hear a knocking at your door, it's your nemesis. "Hey you haven't been around to fight recently, are you ok? Can I get you something?" by Masterpotato002
Excellent post.
My only critique;
>"What? They were comfy!"
This does not fit with the rest of your narrative style.
You go from addressing a wide audience to addressing a 1 on 1.
I get what you were going for, and I think you would find better reception if you described why the protagonist didn't care and maybe gave a brief description as to why their attire was comfortable enough to escape embarrassment.
SpeaksYourWord t1_jeeiix6 wrote
Reply to comment by AutoModerator in [WP] You get reincarnated as a blue whale with the memories of the whaling era as a part of your bargain with God to try and change the fate of the species. by Flaky_Explanation
"Oh, not again..."