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Kristofmorrow OP t1_jbpdtp1 wrote

Reply to comment by CuntMaster16 in After sixteen months of work, I held the first physical copy of my first book. [image] by Kristofmorrow

It’s a fantasy story called the second sun and it’s written as if I tried to birth a baby between Tolkien and Dickens

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CuntMaster16 t1_jbpdx5k wrote

That actually sounds really good. Where can I buy?

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Kristofmorrow OP t1_jbpf2fh wrote

“They drank to quiet their cheerless reflections of the perils of their bounty. Still Morrow suffered the burden of due celebrity for his skills in battle and the legends inspired enemy warriors of some regard to seek him on the field as their nations met to advance the violent ends they efforted to sew shut. While a young man, Still Morrow delighted in these mortal disputes but as the years aged him, he discovered his foes were of eternal youth and ignorance. And despite sharing the dress of previous champions, he saw those before him become but children, anew and scarcely corrupted by war. The old sergeant came to dread the maintenance of his myth, as he realized his survival of so many campaigns was a curse born from the gods, and his state unrivaled would end when feebleness stole his mind or vengeance rent his heart.”

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rainmace t1_jbpnjmu wrote

You realize this stanza barely makes grammatical sense in the English language right?

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Cypher1388 t1_jbpthl9 wrote

Looks like someone doesn't have a voice

But yeah some of the stylistic choices in the application of Grammer are... Sus, but not illegible.

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CuntMaster16 t1_jbpe57l wrote

Also what name did you put for the author? I’m getting a lot of results for that name. Wanna make sure I get the right one. If you don’t want to put it here for ppl to see can you DM me?

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