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BANDlCOOT t1_itb4ada wrote

Reply to comment by HumbleGarbage1795 in An old guy at work is being hassled for not remembering things so he turns on the offensive. by pikknz

It's very poorly structured and not particularly funny, but the joke is the person the old man is speaking to accidentally let slip he is having an affair while flexing his memory.

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pikknz OP t1_itb4jd6 wrote

While not flexing his memory.

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pikknz OP t1_itb4n0g wrote

Two stories colliding is classical joke structure.

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Nesfalo23 t1_itb66na wrote

Sure. If anyone knew the second story.

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pikknz OP t1_itb6bdt wrote

It is obvious from the context.

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KeckyOK t1_itb9sc2 wrote

by 'structure', they meant that you used no punctuation or made any attempt to differentiate who was speaking; rather, you've put both sides of the characters' dialogue on each line. Better example:

"Well, what did you have for breakfast last Tuesday, then?" asks the old man. His co-worker replies, "Porridge, I always eat porridge for breakfast."

"Well, I always heave my breakfast!" said the old man.

Also, once a dialogue is established you can then alternate without stating who is speaking.

"You heave your breakfast?" asks the co-worker.

"Yeah. I'm an old man."

"With a bad memory?"

"Shut the fuck up, Greg!"

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