Hey Astro,

I really liked how you captured John's predicament here. His main issue with his life.

> His recovery would capture their hearts. Minor setbacks would be large obstacles, and small victories would be grand triumphs.

Lines like these were excellent. It shows how his life is so boring now, that even a minor step forward or back could be a momentous occasion for him.

I do just have a few bits and bobs for you though,

> Everyone would cry and support with him.

I think you just have a start "with" here that you don't need.

> Until he sat next to that old woman on the bus.

Here, I think it would work better if this line were on its own paragraph. showing the transition from talking about John's past and childhood to now his present and the bus ride.

> John smiled as emotions stirred with him.

I think you just want a "within" rather than "with" here.

> Would you said you're the same way?" she asked.

And finally, just a "say" here instead of "said".

I hope this helps.

Good Words!