Hey Poetry,

I guess it's a given but I love the poetic language here. The idea of one person thriving at the expense of another is done so well here. And I really like how you exaggerate that to the point of one person living at the expense of another's life. You've done that really well there at the start.

I also like the growth and change you show throughout this poem. How this person goes from incredulous at the idea of sacrificing for someone else to acceptance.

I just have a few bits and bobs for you,

A brief couple, really.

> For a bout of my sadness is low price for your smile to be preserved.

Incredibly tiny nitpick but I think you want an "a" before "low".

Second, I do wonder how this poem would look and read if it were sorted into stanzas. It reads great right now as one block, but maybe stanzas could help?

> But I love you so dearly that I know its only right to let you prosper,

A new stanza after this line could fit the change of mood and theme. Though that's a small suggestion, so feel free to ignore.

I hope this helps.

Good Words!