Hey Kat,

If there's ever been a story with a more satisfying ending, please send it my way. Because I don't think it exists.

There are so many things I loved about this. The focus on her accent and the way you displayed it in her speech was a really nice touch. I also really liked the entire set-up itself and how you tied the quote so well into the story.

I do just have a few bits and bobs for you though,

> Twirling a curl pensively as if the thought alone was too much effort, Sally inquired.

I think switching this to being a comment by Edwin could help the narrative. Here you're telling us that she looks...dumb. And whilst it hints at the ending where we learn that it's all an act, I feel like it could help build Edwin's character if he made the observation that Sally looked like she was confused. I hope that makes sense.

> Let me put it simple-like for a woman’s tiny brain.

And here, the comment "a woman's tiny brain" snagged me a bit. It just read a bit too comically and it didn't really fit Edwin's 'sophisticated' manner if that makes sense. I think something like "a woman's simple brain" may work better maybe?

These are small nitpicks though and absolutely just my opinion, so feel absolutely free to ignore them. You just write too well for me to find anything else.

I hope this helps.

Good Words