Hey Xack,

Heck, you do such an amazing job with descriptions here. The pictures you paint are so amazing.

> It was like holding the perfection of imperfection a thousand times over, every grain astounding in it's own right.

The side-by-side use of "perfect of imperfections" was really great touch. And similarly, the repetition of "wonder" so close together near the end is just so awesome.

I also liked the cosmic irony you pointed out further down. Out of every star/planet/moon and celestial body in the universe, the earth is the only place that has this kind of sand. And even then, humans don't have the capability to admire its beauty. Very well done.

I do just have a few bits and bobs for you though,

> every grain astounding in it's own right.

A simple grammar error here I think. "its" over "it's".

> Byra had seen many marvelous things on her first trip to earth.

I don't think you need this line here. By the end of the story, I get the feeling that Byra is rather new to Earth and sand is the first big thing that really captured her attention. Near the end, she imagines what else she could find on the planet after more exploration.

So the line above kind of contradicts that a little. Or at least makes me want to know what else she's seen.

> lifting her head to star at the earth-bound sky,

I think you want "stare" over "star" here.

> might break way her when the next sun rises.

I'm not too sure what this line is meant to be. But unless I'm completely missing the meaning, I think it needs to be reworded?

I hope this helps.

Good Words!