Hey Tom,

I really liked some of the lines in here.

> how grief is a flood of love persevering

Such an excellent way of describing grief and what it actually represents.

> we walk from class with a cloud of dragonflies lifting our feet > Our notebook and our heart > filled up a little bit more.

And of course, there's the bit that you ended the piece so well with.

I do have a few bits and bobs for you,

Just one, really.

And that is about the format. A few times it felt like the linebreaks simply broke up an otherwise complete sentence. It just made it a little harder to read.

> The true secret of happiness lies in taking a genuine interest > in all the details of daily life.

Here for instance. So I guess what I'm saying is I'm not sure why you have so many linebreaks. Though that absolutely could just be me.

I hope this helps.

Good Words!