Hey Ginger,

I really liked the emotion here, and the way that you showed it.

> Jasmine pursed her lips to smother her chuckles as the pain continued to rise. It lapped the edges of her heart.

I loved this, and the continuation of the personification throughout the piece too. It did a really great job of showing how her sorrow and pain built up.

I do just have a few bits and bobs for you though,

> She stood between two police officers, one of them clutching her backpack. And before her stood Sergeant Geraldine Scott.

Just "stood" twice kind of close together here. Nothing major really.

> “This is the seventh government building you’ve vandalized,”

Here I think more information could help. Was this an ongoing issue where she had vandalised property over weeks/months? Or is this all in one go?

Similarly, what about the sister? When did she pass? How old was she? I only ask because it's a little difficult to deduce if this is a pain Jasmine has been going through for a while now, or if it's something new and recent.

I hope this helps.

Good Words!