Hey Ry

I got through three-quarters of the story, thoroughly enjoying every bit of it and forgot who the writer was...

> “Zammy! I thought we had an agreement, no breaking my windows.

Of course.

I loved this, the exaggerated sheer survival Ernest had to go through to get to his sister contrasted so well with the relaxed life of Maureen. Wonderful job, haha.

I also really liked how you brought the opening quote back into the story at the end there. It fits quite well.

I just have a few bits and bobs for you,

> Maureen was… a bit of a schnicklefritz. Not dumb by any means. Maureen just… floated through life, always assuming things would work out for her.

I'm not too sure here but if this is a quote, should it be italicised or in quotation marks maybe? If it isn't a quote through then there's no issue.

> ‘Zammy’ shambled his way out the way he came,

Just a bit of repetition of "way" here I think.

> “I sorry. I’ve got this quota from my boss–which is what I call the zombie parasite within me–I’ve gotta infect five humans a day or he will not be happy with me.”

This just felt a bit expositiony, especially the bit about how his boss is actually the parasite that controls him. I see the humour you were going for, but it did snag me a bit. Especially because Maureen has apparently dealt with this zombie before. So wouldn't the zombie have already told her about his daily requirements? But that could absolutely just be me.

I hope this helps.

Good Words!