Submitted by AliciaWrites t3_11n2zms in WritingPrompts
galdu t1_jcc2uam wrote
Reply to comment by OldBayJ in [TT] Theme Thursday - Journalism by AliciaWrites
Thanks for sharing this spooky tale!
I really liked this stuff:
- Using the necklace to help us understand the characters. As well as using it to heighten the intensity of the scene.
- The way you described what Button was hearing on the phone. In a small amount of words you were able to give a distinctive sound to it.
- The way the monster was described. Both ambiguous and specific, allowing the reader to imagine whatever springs to mind.
Thing(s) that didn't connect with me:
- The framing backstory is a little confusing. Is Button looking for two missing people or are they looking for Jack? Same thing?
- The recollection of what the boss said interrupted a part of scene that I wanted to be more engrossed in.
Viewing a single comment thread. View all comments