Submitted by veriverd t3_z7un1j in WritingPrompts
Ataraxidermist t1_iy8guzu wrote
House of Change by Daniel O'Brian.
Miranda liked the title, and that was the extend of it. The story itself was lackluster, fantasy aficionados wouldn't find much novelty, those looking to be afraid would miss the shiver down their spines.
That was for the literary criticism. Daniel was also her boyfriend, and he managed to become a published author, which in itself was a feat far beyond her personal appreciation of his book.
This, and more, she thought as she picked up the book to buy it from the store. The pile was rather low, she wasn't the first to buy, despite Daniel having no real reputation as writer to speak of.
"If I may, tell your boyfriend I adore his work," said the clerk, a young, somewhat sheepish looking man.
"Of course," she replied.
A few steps from the exit, she turned back and added, "how do you know my boyfriend wrote it?"
"I'm friends with him."
Odd. Daniel had never told her about him. Nor did she like the glint in his eyes. She left the store, forgetting the strange encounter once outside.
How long had it been since last time she sat on a bench to read a book? She couldn't remember. She decided to celebrate by rekindling this old habit. She found a lone bench in a park, sat down, well protected from the cold in her heavy coat. She smelled the book, just like new, and opened the first page.
She turned page after page. And didn't remember a thing.
Yet she had read several drafts, had encouraged Daniel to go for a bolder opening, had an idea of the general themes. So where was the story about adventure and polymorphism? Where were the sentences and style she knew to dislike?
Instead, the words flew in an alien way, she felt them worm their way under her eyes, and when she closed the book to gaze at the sky above, she still sensed how the words burrowed through her.
It was unpleasant, and incomprehensible. There was no story, she wasn't sure what she had read, only that it had an impact on her.
Passerby nodded at her, with a smile she could only describe as perfectly fake.
"Wonderful book, is it not?" said an elder woman walking with a crutch. In her bag, a copy from House of Change.
For a moment, all motion stopped in the park. Walkers and runners stood in place, gazing straight at Miranda, sporting the exact same wrong smile, carrying their copy of Daniel's book.
She rubbed her eyes. When she opened them again, movement had resumed, as if nothing had happened.
She was sick, had to be.
Against her better judgement, she opened the book again.
The words slipped down her spine, tickled her ribs, swelled her heart. The words played in her flesh like a mad spark ready to create chaos, and through the chaos, make her anew.
A gasp, someone stripped the book from her hands. She had stopped breathing, nearly passed out.
"Don't read too much into it," said the voice of the man who had taken the book.
She looked up.
"Daniel?"
No noise, no motion. They were all looking at them, without a smile, but with that glint in their eyes.
"What is this?" she asked with a trembling voice.
"It isn't a story," Daniel explained, "it's more of a guide. As a human you are both sculptor and sculpture, but I never liked the rudimentary ways we have to practice our art. So I devised... new methods."
Miranda would have told him to knock it off already. But the words still squirmed underneath her skin, eager to break free.
A young boy approached them. As he walked, his shadow distended, the audible crack of breaking bone was heard. His legs got longer with each step, muscles tearing to accommodate the new architecture, spine creaking, pulling on the nerves.
"Oh god," she whispered, as the looming child's frame hid the sun from her.
She passed out.
When she awoke, she was in bed.
What a nightmare it had been. What pleasure it was to wake up under a warm blanket, secure and cozy.
Miranda rubbed her eyes, gasped when she saw House of Change on the nightstand.
With a trembling hand, she reached for the book.
"Not you," said Daniel as he put his own hand on the book to keep it closed.
"Why not?"
"I don't want you to change."
Miranda shook her head, was about to scream, kept it in through sheer willpower.
"Enough. It's a bad joke. I'm just sick, that's all."
"You're not sick."
"I said enough," it was both an order and a plea.
Daniel sighed, and rose. She heard the already familiar crack, saw the bone splinters poke through the flesh and clothes, dragged the blanket to her as a feeble attempt to protect herself as a new set of bloody, spidery limbs protruded from Daniel's torn back.
There he stood, still, smiling, bloody, and bloodily happy.
Out of wits, Miranda asked:
"Why don't you want me to change?"
"Few things are precious enough to be kept as they are. You are one of them."
Daniel left the room with his book.
MyloRolfe t1_iy8nqgo wrote
Alright Junji Ito we get it, you're the master of horror, no need to rub it in our faces
Ataraxidermist t1_iy8rsz2 wrote
Dear lord no. I read one of his stories and never dared to pick up another.
He's in another universe when it comes to horror.
MyloRolfe t1_iy8sg6h wrote
My imagination is so vivid that this came across as really close. Same kind of body twisting that he likes to do. It looks absolutely disgusting in my head which gives the best kind of gut clenches.
Ataraxidermist t1_iy8tn0h wrote
Here's me, happy I'm not in your head. Jokes aside, a huge thank you, that's quite the compliment.
Deloptin t1_iy8v0zk wrote
I used to be so scared of horror films, games, etc... then I read mystery of amigara fault or whatever the name is (I refuse to search it up) and now I can play horror games without even flinching
Ataraxidermist t1_iy8vjzr wrote
Was it the one with the human shaped holes up in the hills?
Deloptin t1_iy8w6be wrote
Yes it was
Ataraxidermist t1_iy8xb1i wrote
My condolences, I read it too. Haven't fully recovered yet.
BrienneOfDarth t1_iy98odw wrote
With a partner and a twisted sense of humor, quote it during intimate times.
ButIDontKnowHow t1_iy99cry wrote
I mean, "This is my hole! It's made for me!" wouldn't be entirely out of place in the boudoir. Weird, maybe, but not horrific.
pyrodice t1_iya733l wrote
😂
SweetHammond t1_iy9t9a0 wrote
Could you share that? I’m a veteran when it comes to horror and am not easily impressed, which kind off sucks sometimes. Would love to read that!
Ataraxidermist t1_iy9uel3 wrote
It's a Japanese manga called the enigma of Amigara fault. Junji ito is generally considered a modern master of horror, and he does indeed terrify me.
Edit: it's a short story, meaning one or two tomes only. So if you're curious about the reputation of master this guy has, it's an excellent way to verify for yourself.
And give up any hope for restful sleep
gabeheadman t1_iy9vhsq wrote
I read this once, like 15 years ago. I still remember it and it still gives me chills thinking about it. It's just so completely unsettling. I refuse to touch anything he's got going on.
pyrodice t1_iya765f wrote
Is that a collection of his stories? I was going to suggest "spirals" but if it's already in there…
faderjack t1_iyass88 wrote
That story was included at the end of the full published version of Gyo. I consider Gyo to be one of his weakest works, so I'd probably just find Enigma of Amigara Fault online, because it is one of his best short works. His best longform story is Uzumaki, which is def worth purchasing if you find you enjoy Amigara.
Ataraxidermist t1_iya9jmb wrote
Can't tell you, I read the e book version, I don't know how the physical manga is packaged.
SweetHammond t1_iy9w5ss wrote
Thanks!
Tomorrow_Is_Today1 t1_iyb89pt wrote
I was okay with the "my hole" story but the one about people having really long dreams haunts me to this day. I think it's called Nagai Yume.
taylor212834 t1_iyamlwd wrote
Me too
MtnNerd t1_iybc4t5 wrote
I recommend also picking up Uzumaki.
Spore_Flower t1_iya67vh wrote
Thanks for the reminder. My brain worked really hard to forget that one.
Dark_Shade_75 t1_iybi36q wrote
THIS IS MY HOLE. IT WAS MEANT FOR ME!
Tomorrow_Is_Today1 t1_iyb7tpu wrote
Same here. I can't read Junji Ito, it's too much
cheesynougats t1_iy9iq3b wrote
I got more than a bit of In the Mouth of Madness vibe from this.
Penelopeep25 t1_iya1lju wrote
Holy fuck, I rarely take notice of the prompts and its even rarer for me to read the whole thing. I'm so glad this was the exception. This has got to be one of the best stories I've ever read on this sub. It was really fucking creepy in a way that horror rarely ever hits me. It goes up there with that story where Death becomes known as Life, the story about the Skips, and the story about not looking at the Moon, as far as impact goes. Awesome story!!! I aspire to be this good of a writer.
Ataraxidermist t1_iya582k wrote
Wow, that's one of the best compliments I got. I'm surprised my story worked so well, but damn does it make my day. Thanks a lot, glad you liked it that much, it's really encouraging for me.
Penelopeep25 t1_iyb0wk1 wrote
No sweat! Thanks for putting this out into the world, it was fun to read and honestly pretty inspiring for someone like me who really eats sleeps and breaths writing but never actually does it, BUT WANTS TO. But a good story like this in such a short space? Makes me feel like I can start small and still amount to something ^^
Ataraxidermist t1_iyccle7 wrote
I started on this sub.
If you look at my post history, you'll find a truckload of stories all written in more or less half an hour, most of which had little success. But it's a good way to get it off your chest while working on a bigger thing alongside it.
Said bigger thing being a novel called House of Change.
Penelopeep25 t1_iyco7nv wrote
Oh woah I'm so stupid I didn't even think House Of Change would be a real novel, nevertheless yours! It's funny because I wrote on this sub once, and it did pretty well actually, I was blown away by how much people liked it. But anyway, it was also a prompt related to a story and I included references to my actual aspired story in it. So hey, great minds think alike, I guess, lmao.
Maybe I should start responding to prompts myself. Gonna have a lot of free time today, if I'm actually feeling up to it I might try.
What is House Of Change about? I really liked your style in this so maybe once it's out I'll actually finally buy a new book for the first time in a million years :')
Ataraxidermist t1_iycsezn wrote
Somewhat similar themes, people who find a way to break their minds and body to bring in change. Story is told by the point of view of a recruit who changes body each chapter, and slowly comes to loathe the house. I finished the first draft, but now there's the rewriting process.
One of my earliest shorts about an abduction on this sub is pretty much the introduction.
The great thing is that I tried out a few things on this sub to see how well it went or not. The sub isn't too fond of horror, keep that in mind, but it's great even just for yourself to out it in word and see how you feel about it.
PapayaAgreeable7152 t1_iyacllx wrote
>story where Death becomes known as Life, the story about the Skips, and the story about not looking at the Moon
These sound interesting. Do you know the titles of them? Or where I can find them?
Wenchpie t1_iyaqhqk wrote
Seconded can you please post a link?
Penelopeep25 t1_iyb4keh wrote
Here you go!
Wenchpie t1_iybtmsn wrote
Thank you so much 😊
Penelopeep25 t1_iycns48 wrote
You're welcome! It was fun reading them again, got me in a writing spirit which doesn't happen nearly as much as I'd like.
Penelopeep25 t1_iyb4idj wrote
I FOUND THEM
PapayaAgreeable7152 t1_iyb4ltz wrote
You are the best! Thank you so much!!
Penelopeep25 t1_iybag0d wrote
You're welcome! I love your username BTW lol now I want papaya even though I don't even really like them.
Penelopeep25 t1_iyb1046 wrote
Oh god 😭 they're on this sub, I'll try to find them... if I do I'll reply to ur comment again.
Dr_Hajime t1_iy99wjl wrote
It's quite cute. Love the story.
yancovigen t1_iy9kw11 wrote
I love the story too but that was anything but cute lmaoo
Dr_Hajime t1_iy9l775 wrote
I liked how he told her he never wanted her to change. That a monstruosity can somehow feel affection is cute, isn't it?
yancovigen t1_iy9nzxa wrote
Honestly when you put it like that I can see why it could be cute, I think I was thrown by the horror, but you’re right
tomatotomato t1_iyc3w1g wrote
He probably doesn't have human emotions (he just mimics them), so his "affection" might be of different nature. So, I'd imagine he might be saving her up for later, for more sinister purposes.
cosmic_grayblekeeper t1_iycmqi5 wrote
I mean wouldn't his affection for her have carried over from when he was human? He purposely had her reading the wrong copy of the book draft because he didn't want her to change before he became a monster.
tomatotomato t1_iydron4 wrote
Has he ever been a real human though? The story doesn’t give us any background.
lesamuen t1_iy9zid0 wrote
I'm literally torn between thinking this is wholesome or horrifying.
Ataraxidermist t1_iya4thm wrote
Personally, being kept untouched because an unfathomable being has taken a fancy in me without giving me a choice while the world outside turns into something unrecognizable sounds pretty horrible.
But since fifty shades of grey came out, I realized the definition of wholesome and romantic varies a lot more wildly than I would have expected.
Phoenix4235 t1_iy9l73b wrote
Wow - that was a wild ride! Some people may want more, but imho it can take real talent to find the right balance between enough details for closure vs. managing to be suspenseful in very short stories. Yours manages it perfectly, and leaves you with an ominous dread. Very well done!
Ataraxidermist t1_iy9rmm5 wrote
Thank you! I'm lucky with how it came out considering I wrote it in a rush, but it was a fun prompt to try out. Glad you enjoyed it.
rmczpp t1_iy9w9mr wrote
That was spectacular... Jesus christ though, I need to sit down.
Ataraxidermist t1_iy9zcvl wrote
Just grow a second pair of legs to sit on. Jokes aside, thanks a lot for the compliment.
CommanderCori t1_iy9xz2e wrote
That was phenomenal, I'm officially creeped out by it all, well done! :)
Ataraxidermist t1_iy9z8bi wrote
It's my pleasure, thank you.
GottJammern t1_iyaf5a3 wrote
Have you ever listened to The Magnus Archives? This has The Flesh all over it.
Ataraxidermist t1_iyaftum wrote
Never heard of it, I'll check it out
Engesa t1_iyci9gl wrote
You have to get pretty far in it before that reference makes sense, iirc.
Drakmanka t1_iyaj4bg wrote
Oddly sweet ending. I like it.
Rareu t1_iyangth wrote
The terror is now knowing.
MechisX t1_iybdvr3 wrote
I need this book.
Ataraxidermist t1_iyccrmu wrote
Believe it or not, the book I'm working on is titled House of Change.
Dark_Aves t1_iyaa8s2 wrote
This was awesome!
honestwizard t1_iyauksw wrote
Holy shit this was a nice read. Thank you
MrBwnrrific t1_iybv6p0 wrote
“Do you read Sutter Cane?”
MolhCD t1_iyc2940 wrote
nice boyfriend
Nebelherrin t1_iycabi5 wrote
Jeesh, that was well written and terrifying
kyuu435 t1_iyd156j wrote
I loved the House of Change short stories i read a while ago, and i love this one too!
Ataraxidermist t1_iydjalr wrote
Thank you, it's my pleasure.
Hidesuru t1_iye35c8 wrote
Now that's some fucked up shit.
Absolutely phenomenal job, mate! :-P
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