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kmmck t1_iyszg8v wrote

Reply to comment by photoshopper42 in [WP] After eons of refining your work, you summon the genie one last time. "Finally want to use your third wish? I thought the last two has taught you a lesson." You remain silent, and give him a dictionary-thick contract that cast the genie an unavoidable sufferings for eons, and inevitable death. by alacz

I fucking hate genies. Thanks for writing this awesome story. Just straight to the point torture, with a funny punchline in the end.

The only comment I would give is that I wish you spent more time portraying the genie as afraid or begging for his life or something like that. This way the revenge would have been more impactful.

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photoshopper42 t1_iyt1uyv wrote

That is a good note! Thank you, I will try to keep it in mind for next time!

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kmmck t1_iyt8tp6 wrote

Good luck on your journey as a writer!

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Notabug255 t1_iytk6v8 wrote

My guy was already so jagged from the first two wishes he didn't even bat an eye out of sadism himself, he just wanted the genie to get wrecked and matter of factly watched

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