Submitted by salmontail t3_zk98v0 in WritingPrompts
Thetallerestpaul t1_izzh1lq wrote
The tavern was quietening down, as the evening swallowed the light and the regulars swallowed their drinks. Those looking for fighting or fornicating had either found what they were looking for, or taken their search elsewhere. Those that remained were there for the company of friends or for drinking in silence. So it was with the group of young men and women talking loudly of romance and loss at one table and the single old man at the table next to them.
"....and every day she goes to wait for him, at the Lake of Longing", said the young man with a smile at the women to his left. "Hoping that today might be the day she is finally reunited with her love". The woman smiled back, both believing incorrectly that no-one else at the table saw them flirting.
"Oh, it's so beautiful", said the woman.
"Fuck", said the man at the next table. "Can you kids just shut up about it? There is nothing beautiful about what I help my lady do at that lake each day, and one day soon you'll know that first hand, I'd wager. She's not going to be able to carry on for long."
"I...sorry", said the woman with eyes downcast. The old man frowned. He'd not meant to be so harsh. It wasn't the girl's fault.
"What do you mean 'you help your lady'?", asked another of the group. "Who are you?"
"I attend the Princess", said the old man. "Have done for my whole life. And will do until one or both of us is dead and hopefully gone."
"Come", urged the man working to impress his beau, "join us, share a drink. You can tell us what really happens!"
The old man shook his head, but the girl who'd apologised looked up at him with a smile that was so like his Lady's that he couldn't help himself.
"I'll thank you kindly for a drink, and if you really want to hear it, I'll tell it". He eased himself from his seat and came to join them. "I'll snap straight to it, if you don't mind. I'm sure you don't want to spend too much of your evening with an old soak like me. You've got better things to be doing", he said and pointed at the flirting couple. "Especially you two", he said, to the amusement of the other drinkers.
The old man filled their glasses, and leaned in to tell his tale.
"You said that my Lady goes to wait for the love that never returned from war, but I'm afraid you are only part right about that. The Prince did return, and does return over and over again to this day. At least something that looks like the Prince. He came home many years ago. He spoke like the Prince and moved like the Prince, but both my Lady and I knew something was wrong. You know when you surprise someone, and in that moment you see what they really think, as the facade they were wearing slips? Well, it was like that. In a certain light, or when he thought no-one was looking you saw something else looking out from inside."
The tavern grew quieter, and a few other ears on other tables began to turn toward the old man and his yarn.
"My Lady grew suspicious. She hid his return from her family and instead took him out to the Lake, to confront him at the place they first fell in love. It was just those two, that first time, so I only heard it from her, but having seen it since I can believe her story. She came back that first night, alone, soaked through, and shaking in grief."
"What happened?", interrupted a man on another table, and get groans of frustration from the other listeners.
"She confronted him, and his true nature was revealed. It was not her Prince, but something vile that lived and grew in the suffering and filth of war, and it wore his likeness. She drowned it in the Lake, staring at the face she loved, to protect us all from what that thing could do to this land."
The old man drained his glass.
"And since that day I've helped her protect us all many times. It returns to the Lake. Sometimes months hence, sometimes years. But it always returns. It's hungry, you see. Hungry for suffering and death. The war that created it has only whetted its appetite. So it comes back and it tries to convince her it's her Prince. Each time it does a little better and gets a little closer to being convincing, but each time she sees through it, and drowns it once more, with my help."
"But one day soon, she'll be too old, too weak. Or it will find the right words to convince her this time it's really him. One way or another, she won't be able to stop it forever. So enjoy your drinks, and enjoy each other", he said as he stood up. "You might not have forever left to do either."
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r/talleresttales
beeeight t1_izznz5y wrote
well done
Thetallerestpaul t1_j011qfa wrote
Thanks! Nice to wake up to this having been read a load of times.
the-book-anaconda t1_j014gih wrote
r/WritingPromptsturnednosleep
Thetallerestpaul t1_j0158be wrote
This is not my normal direction. I'm more of a r/GoSleep kind of guy!
S4njay t1_j01a4t2 wrote
I was like, "that sub exists?". But as it turns out, it does exist!
Funny how most of the posts there are from you, though.
Thetallerestpaul t1_j01bdbo wrote
Yeah, and even that not for months. Someone on the WP discord server proposed it, and we all said go do it. But then no-one had any real energy to go and sell it to people, so its basically the 5 people who liked the idea on discord!
S4njay t1_j01bsyt wrote
Makes sense
Rob-L_Eponge t1_j0086lx wrote
Happy cake day! You wrote an amazing story!!!
Thetallerestpaul t1_j011r0s wrote
Thanks! I now need to find some cake.
NotAMeatPopsicle t1_j026k3f wrote
Here you go! Try some Pork Cake. Also, your story was awesome.
Thetallerestpaul t1_j02o2kt wrote
Pork Cake?
Pork Cake!
NotAMeatPopsicle t1_j04j86p wrote
I’ve found a few things he’s made and want to try… but Pork Cake is not one of them.
SuicidalHoe t1_j00j11r wrote
This was so good!!!
Thetallerestpaul t1_j011s1z wrote
Thanks, I've been away from writing anything for a few months, so good to be back in the groove.
SuicidalHoe t1_j014chn wrote
Happy cake day! Before I forget to say it, ha
zephyr_man300 t1_j00q63x wrote
Amazing, this is pretty chilling!
Thetallerestpaul t1_j012qol wrote
Thanks. I'm not normally one for ghost story type vibes, but once I decided it would be in a smoky tavern, I couldn't help it.
shadeslayer0930 t1_j013ju3 wrote
This is so good! Is this based on PTSD suffered by war veterans or something different and more on fantasy based? Because thats what im getting from the whole "he's been different ever since the war" vibes
Thetallerestpaul t1_j01541k wrote
Based on trauma, yeah, but then kicked up a level in the fantasy land where it's not the person that has been damaged by the experience, but a whole new thing has replaced them.
NotAMeatPopsicle t1_j026q5i wrote
I got Doppler/shapeshifter vibes.
For a moment I thought you were going to write in the Frog Prince twist.
MrRedoot55 t1_j00rnce wrote
Great story.
Thetallerestpaul t1_j012r1h wrote
Thanks for reading
dreamsofpurple t1_j00vf1g wrote
damn this is well written!!
Thetallerestpaul t1_j012rth wrote
Thank you. It's been a while, so good you enjoyed it
Davikka t1_j00srnj wrote
Slow clap 👏
Thetallerestpaul t1_j012x3o wrote
I'm not sure if this is good or bad? Where I live slow clap would be for sarcastic clapping, but that might be different all over. Hopefully, it's a clap of enjoyment! Have a good one.
Davikka t1_j03dmf1 wrote
Ah sorry, to clarify this slow clap was in utter awe and appreciation!
tarok26 t1_j014lnn wrote
Good one
Thetallerestpaul t1_j015997 wrote
Thanks!
Spriggan_42 t1_j01hthf wrote
Wow! Amazing story; this type of plot I find so fascinating, how it’s a promise of destruction and death that is yet thwarted by heroic characters!
Really well conceived atmosphere, I pictured everything really well!
Thetallerestpaul t1_j01l1hy wrote
Thanks Spriggan, glad you liked it. I enjoy the concept that people don't even realise how often they are saved, by new technology or medicine, or others actions.
Gaelic-Colt t1_j00mi61 wrote
Happy cake day! That was great!
Thetallerestpaul t1_j012sbm wrote
Thanks for the Cake Day wishes
SamuelVimesTrained t1_j0194a5 wrote
This left me breathless for a bit.
AWESOME!
Thetallerestpaul t1_j01clfc wrote
Great username as well. I love a bit of Vimes in the wild.
SamuelVimesTrained t1_j01klkh wrote
Thanks. Lucky I could claim this.
But yes - it`s true too - many life lessons, including becoming a better me - I learned from Sir Samuel .
Angel-dentist- t1_j01c9sm wrote
The story is sooooo good. I love it, also happy cake day
Thetallerestpaul t1_j01cmfy wrote
Thanks and Thanks!
Spriggan_42 t1_j01ha2n wrote
Happy cake day!
Thetallerestpaul t1_j01kkpv wrote
Thanks! Have a good day.
Spriggan_42 t1_j01knk1 wrote
You too!
WA_State_Buckeye t1_j02l407 wrote
THAT was a darned good read!
Thetallerestpaul t1_j02o7bh wrote
Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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