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Aristiden t1_jedof3y wrote

Some feedback:
The verse is much stronger than the chorus and quite a jarring shift. Mostly that's because the verse has a distinct style and the chorus seems to be aiming for a much poppier tone. I would recommend you stick to your stronger songwriting instincts rather than trying to find something pop. It would take a lot of luck for pop audiences to find you anyway, so why not try to lean into a more attainable and more artistic niche?
Also, be careful with how you assign syllables to melody lines. In the pursuit of making your lyrics accessible and poppy, you've used cliched phrases which might have the right number of syllables, but their accented syllables don't fit the beat of your song.

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matthew_pugh98 t1_jedcyh3 wrote

Modern Bodies - Marble Requiem

Produced by the band, “Marble Requiem” was recorded at home in Tupelo and features Matt Pugh and Preston George, Modern Bodies’ core duo, performing with Jesse Sutton (bass, backing vocals), and Trey McCarter (drums, backing vocals), the band’s live lineup. The album's artwork was painted by Mara Califf. Inspired by space-rock and 70’s psychedelia, Marble Requiem takes Modern Bodies into a two part psychedelic odyssey, harkening Pink Floyd and Todd Rundgren.

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FluidDrink5040 t1_jeblpdk wrote

YoungOne - Move It

So this was the second song I released, it's rap/hip-hop and it was basically a summer tune and having fun with it but yet still got meaning, I'm tryna move my way up the ranks whilst tryna make folk move to my music at the same time lol.

I've put this in here as I will be releasing more music this year and just tryna see who digs with it.

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