AdmiralAthena
AdmiralAthena t1_iya5zvp wrote
Reply to comment by WIHachillies in [WP] You are a superhero whose civilian identity is a teacher. One student asked if you could tutor them after school, and you agreed. After it was over, you escorted them to the front of the school for their parent to pick them up... and you see your nemesis waiting by the car. by SomeSortOfUser
Who is Nay?
AdmiralAthena t1_iy9y5r0 wrote
Reply to comment by sufrt in [WP] Your Significant Other has landed a book publishing deal! You're very proud of them, even if you don't actually enjoy their writing. One day, on a whim, you buy an actual copy in a book store. It's nothing like the pages they gave you to read. Nothing. by veriverd
He feels horror, we don't. The point of horror isn't to scare the characters, it's to scare the audience.
AdmiralAthena t1_iy9x0me wrote
Reply to comment by sufrt in [WP] Your Significant Other has landed a book publishing deal! You're very proud of them, even if you don't actually enjoy their writing. One day, on a whim, you buy an actual copy in a book store. It's nothing like the pages they gave you to read. Nothing. by veriverd
But where's the horror? The character feels horror, but we don't, because we don't have enough context to know why they're horrified.
Was the book about a wife murdering their spouse, and they realize the murder victim represents them, and their wife might be planning to kill them?
AdmiralAthena t1_iy994ad wrote
Reply to comment by sufrt in [WP] Your Significant Other has landed a book publishing deal! You're very proud of them, even if you don't actually enjoy their writing. One day, on a whim, you buy an actual copy in a book store. It's nothing like the pages they gave you to read. Nothing. by veriverd
Too short, doesn't really go anywhere, or explain why they reacted with terror. Confusion would make much more sense.
I mean, it could easily be explained as "this is actually someone else's book, and some prankster switched the dust covers." No reason for horror to be the first reaction.
AdmiralAthena t1_iy7l5c2 wrote
Reply to comment by ALuckyMushroom in [WP] As a vampire, I follow traditions. My fiancé is human and just found out that human brides/grooms are to be bit to become a vampire themselves. She absolutely refuses to let that happen, and says the wedding is off unless I refuse to bite her. I feel like she's disrespecting tradition. AITA? by Crystal1501
Him?
I kinda took it for granted that they're lesbians.
Vampire wedding just seems really gay, for some reason?
AdmiralAthena t1_ithylv4 wrote
Reply to comment by AutoModerator in [WP] An Eldritch Moon suddenly appears in the sky, and you and billions others scream as you turn into horribly corrupted mounds of flesh... But your eyesight is better? And your back pains are gone? And apparently you’re immortal now so... Maybe things aren’t that bad... by Itaysadan
When daybreaks, but more moony. And also pro melted flesh monster
AdmiralAthena t1_irruswx wrote
Reply to comment by Max_Insanity in [WP] "Really?" The Dark Lord asked in disbelief, "This is the best the Chosen One can do? Screw it. If we're doing this, we're going to do this properly. I'll train you." 10 years later, your training is complete, but your time spent with the Dark Lord has given you some conflicting feelings. by IndependentWin6
What?
AdmiralAthena t1_iybzqky wrote
Reply to comment by exponentials in [WP] The Villain finished his monologue. Civilians standing around waited for the Hero to begin the fight, "Well, what are waiting for? Demolish the bad guy!" The Hero responded, "Hang on, he's made a couple of good points. We should hear him out." by WrongEinstein
The ending seems abrupt and out of nowhere.
Almost kinda anti climatic. Like, it builds something cool up, and then this shadow guy comes out of nowhere and destroys the plot.