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ColebladeX t1_jdx3v6b wrote

I wasn’t a dumb man being a super villain you gotta be smart or you don’t last long in the business that’s just a fact of life, and I was a very smart villain. Sure I hadn’t achieved world domination but at this point it was a little pointless, my nemesis was just too enjoyable to defeat I could’ve destroyed her years ago I had the plan in place and all the materials for it ready. But I had other things to worry about, like my family or the fact my daughter had a new girlfriend one which my minions employees couldn’t find any information on (I’m a bit of a helicopter dad I’m entitled to this after the werewolf boyfriend incident). My beloved daughter had been gushing about her girlfriend when she came by for lunch. So when Olympia kicked open my very unlocked door and demanded their girl friend back I quickly put two and two together. Which is why with an evil grin and said. “Hi I’m her father let’s have a talk and get to know each other.” I knew this was gonna be a good day as they both cringed and took a seat knowing I was gonna milk this for hours.

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Glitchracer t1_jdxha57 wrote

It would be easier to read if broken up into paragraphs, and a little more attention to punctuation. The werewolf boyfriend aside was great, and I like the idea of a supervillain invested in his daughter’s life. Also that her SO is another girl.

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Tahxeol t1_jdxl7nm wrote

To add to this: depending on your device, pressing enter may not be enough to jump a line.

On my phone, I personally need to press it twice. There is a full empty line between those two paragraphs. Otherwise, it does this (Yes, I jumped three times, no, it doesn’t display beyond the editor)

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