Submitted by Kitty_Fuchs t3_zvvclr in WritingPrompts
nomadwannabe t1_j1td94z wrote
Reply to comment by UnpluggedMaestro in [WP] You died and awoke in the afterlife. It's quite nice actually. The people and atmosphere are a lot nicer than you are used to and there is no stress or pressure. When you ask what good deed got you into heaven you are informed that this is hell, followed by a visit from a very concerned demon. by Kitty_Fuchs
Me also. It’s beautifully written but I can’t quite grasp what’s happening.
tartufu t1_j1tfh87 wrote
I’m thinking the person was wired so differently that he could never understand or feel joy. But he likes to sit at the coffeeshop sometimes to see how people around him could do normal things and feel joy.
In his personal hell, he has to sit at the coffeeshop and be constantly reminded he’s not normal.
And this is a super dark thought, but he might have done something to the barista who was kind to him. And now he has to live with it
FirstSineOfMadness t1_j1u477l wrote
Turns out ‘faceless girl’ was literal D:
nomadwannabe t1_j1u6tbj wrote
Interesting add about the girl. Thank you for explaining!
karnal_chikara t1_j1zysbo wrote
Woaahhhhh Fuck i thought it implied romance
Korthalion t1_j1thgv6 wrote
It's a kind of pain those of us that struggle to fit in can inflict upon ourselves. To sit somewhere 'normal' as a self-perceived outsider, and watch everybody else go about a life you can never have. I'd almost call it wistful, yet melancholy.
Enjoying coffee with a friend, perhaps going on a lunch date with someone you're getting to know, these things are very rare or simply don't happen for some people, for a variety of reasons.
I think that's what makes this story so well-written: it's open-ended as to why the protagonist feels this way, and so a greater variety of readers can connect and self-insert. For me it's Aspergers.
lsp2005 t1_j1uwrm1 wrote
Alone in a crowd of people.
nomadwannabe t1_j1u6qmy wrote
Thank you for explaining that to me; that makes sense.
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Starrion t1_j1uzt68 wrote
I get it. And that’s amazing. It took five read through msg to understand, they cannot connect. The nice atmosphere, people relaxing, open clean space, they are alone and in a personal trap of isolation that they cannot understand or overcome. And it’s hell for them. And the way it’s written the reader experiences the apartness and confusion. Well done
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