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atomicitalian t1_jabr3pj wrote

I mean this isn't really a plot. I guess it could be a good inciting incident but you'd need to probably give us more of the story before we can give any solid feedback regarding it's quality.

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Safe-Raspberry-343 t1_jabr7b6 wrote

I just wanted to give an attention grabber. I don't want to spoil the ideas I have for anything further or the ending I have plans for.

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